1. Posted: October 9, 2019In:

    (Revision #3) It’s 1963. A naive teenager and her older sister, sibling rivals who argue over everything, go to an all-night party that sets them on the path to a singing career. They secure a recording contract, but soon discover that the rock’n roll lifestyle is a roller coaster lifestyle of extreme highs and tragic lows.

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    In drama, the bad gals and guys get all the lucky breaks; the good gals and guys get none-- they have to earn their success the old fashioned way, through hard work and perseverance..? Yet in this scenario, the girls seems to get the luck breaks, success is handed to them on a silver platter.? ThereRead more

    In drama, the bad gals and guys get all the lucky breaks; the good gals and guys get none– they have to earn their success the old fashioned way, through hard work and perseverance..? Yet in this scenario, the girls seems to get the luck breaks, success is handed to them on a silver platter.? There is nothing to indicate they earned success on their own merits, by their own efforts.

    Further, there is nothing new in a story of a career that is a roller coaster ride of highs and lows.? That’s SOP for just about every movie ever made about the rise and fall and rise and fall of? musician.

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  2. Posted: October 3, 2019In:

    During a solo expedition through the Australian outback, a lonely female scientist befriends a mysterious traveller via her long-range UHF radio, but things turn sinister when he insists on meeting up in the middle of nowhere.

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    Paul Clarke: I agree that a logline should not reveal the Big Payoff, even for a short.? The journey to that Big Payoff should stand on its own; that is, it ought to be interesting, compelling, dramatic in its own right.? A logline should describe the journey to a destination, not the arrival. A texRead more

    Paul Clarke:

    I agree that a logline should not reveal the Big Payoff, even for a short.? The journey to that Big Payoff should stand on its own; that is, it ought to be interesting, compelling, dramatic in its own right.? A logline should describe the journey to a destination, not the arrival.

    A textbook example is “The Sixth Sense”.? The Big Payoff, the Final Reveal is a whopper, one of the most famous in the history of cinema — but the dramatic journey is interesting, compelling in its own right.

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  3. Posted: October 5, 2019In:

    A recently engaged vain sports star is forced to compete in a drag queen competition. After a wealthy psychopath out bids him on an auction record breaking painting by a famous outsider artist.

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    Philipe Le Miere:I respectfully disagree.? You may have an interesting premise for a story, but I do not see a logical casual relationship between the defining characteristic of the main character, the inciting incident created by the antagonist and the plot problem.First of all, I haven't read abouRead more

    Philipe Le Miere:

    I respectfully disagree.? You may have an interesting premise for a story, but I do not see a logical casual relationship between the defining characteristic of the main character, the inciting incident created by the antagonist and the plot problem.

    First of all, I haven’t read about Aristotle’s Poetics; instead I’ve read? the Poetics.? Okay, several translations of the classic.? Murphy’s citation is from chapter 9 and I suggest the entire chapter needs to be read to understand the full meaning Aristotle discussion of necessary and probable causation in drama.? Context matters.

    Second, in the standard statement of a logical syllogism:

    All men are mortal (universal statement)
    Socrates is? a man? (particular statement)
    Therefore, Socrates is mortal (logical inference from the two)

    For the logical inference to be valid? the 2nd statement must contain an element that is a member of a universal set in the 1st term.? In this case? man is an? element of the universal set of men, right?
    Further the 3rd sentence and 1st sentence must share a common term.? In this case it is? mortal, the descriptive term to be logically deduced.

    Whereas in your syllogism:

    A straight vain sports star
    is Outbid by psychopath on expensive painting
    Therefore, he performs in a drag queen competition

    There is no element in the 2nd sentence that is a member of a universal set in the 1st term.? In fact there is no shared word or term tetween the 2 sentences.
    Furthermore, there is no common term that is logically deduced between the 1st and 3rd sentence.? Again, the 3rd and 1st sentence have no words, no terms in common. “Drag” in the 3rd sentence is not the same term and does not have the same meaning as “straight” in the 1st .? Rather the two are contrary terms.

    Ergo, I stand by my original statement.? A bridge of necessary and sufficient terms and logic are missing.? I take loglines at face value, at what they literally say, not what I think the writer meant to say.? Words I can read; minds I can’t.

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