1. Posted: September 12, 2019In:

    When an exiled gangster turned priest discovers that his mother is dying, he must make peace with his ex partner in crime in order to return home.

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    dpg Singularity

    Hmm.? If the priest's objective goal is to visit his mother, what is his subjective need for doing so? (Subjective needs are not usually explicitly stated in a logline, but it strengthens the logline when the subjective need is implicit.)

    Hmm.? If the priest’s objective goal is to visit his mother, what is his subjective need for doing so? (Subjective needs are not usually explicitly stated in a logline, but it strengthens the logline when the subjective need is implicit.)

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  2. Posted: September 10, 2019In:

    In a tragic incident that led to the dead of parents and the loss of her eyes as a child, a blind female psychologist who is very good in using her other senses is hired by the FBI to solve crimes.

    dpg Singularity

    I am curious as to how she would be able to more than compensate for her blindness with other senses.? A hyper-acute sense of hearing would only work if she's present at the scene of the crime, at the time of the crime.? A hyper-acute sense of smell might work -- she's could be a human blood hound.Read more

    I am curious as to how she would be able to more than compensate for her blindness with other senses.? A hyper-acute sense of hearing would only work if she’s present at the scene of the crime, at the time of the crime.? A hyper-acute sense of smell might work — she’s could be a human blood hound.

    Otherwise she would have to have hyper-developed cognitive abilities to adduce and deduce from the evidence –? a handicapped female version of Sherlock Holmes.? Or it’s just plain magic: she develops an extrasensory ability to envision what happened and who dunnit.

    And agree with Paul Clarke that because of her handicap she would have? to be teamed up with a partner who can compensate for her handicap.? And, of course, it would have to be an Odd Couple relationship.

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  3. Posted: September 11, 2019In:

    “When a die-hard Alfa-male falls for a vegan, he teams with his childhood best friend who lives an alternative lifestyle in order to learn how to be a beta and win the heart of his love” Possible title: My Fair Soy Boy

    dpg Singularity

    Thanks for the clarification.Maybe something like:A toxic male rejected by every woman he courts hires a life coach to show him how to be a modern, sensitive man.(23 words)Rejected by every woman he courts:? I suggest that his problem is more than just being accused; he's rejected over and over andRead more

    Thanks for the clarification.

    Maybe something like:

    A toxic male rejected by every woman he courts hires a life coach to show him how to be a modern, sensitive man.
    (23 words)

    Rejected by every woman he courts😕 I suggest that his problem is more than just being accused; he’s rejected over and over and over. Violently rejected. Act 1 could have scenes like the ones in “Groundhog Day” where Rita rejects Phil again and again and again with slaps to his face. So a series of escalating rejections: Girls laugh in his face and storm away, slap his face, fling drinks in his face, kick him in the shins; the topper to the running gag is when he’s laughed at,? slapped in the face and kicked him in the groin by the same girl.

    Life coach: Trendy and, imho, makes more sense.? If he’s so toxic, how would he have won the friendship of any girl in his youth?

    Or maybe he begs for the last one to reject him, the one who kicked him in the groin, to “domestic” him.? She refuses, of course, until he offers to pay.

    Whatever, the premise has a lot of possibilities. Lots of options to play with.? Best wishes.

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