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A newly divorced Canadian fights for his life in the 1990's East/West Rap War after a chance meeting with Tupac Shakur.
What has newly divorced got to do with anything about a rap war? It may add color to the character for the story as a whole but it doesn't seem to add anything to the logline.
What has newly divorced got to do with anything about a rap war? It may add color to the character for the story as a whole but it doesn’t seem to add anything to the logline.
See less"Set in a futuristic world where humans are controlled by their fascist government, a career criminal gets drawn into a deadly plot when he rescues a upper class woman from the secret police and has to depend on her to survive."
The logline keeps morphing such that I'm not sure what the kernel of the idea really is. Whatever, I suggest raising the stakes for the man: it's not a matter of just locating his daughter, it's also matter of also saving her life before...?
The logline keeps morphing such that I’m not sure what the kernel of the idea really is. Whatever, I suggest raising the stakes for the man: it’s not a matter of just locating his daughter, it’s also matter of also saving her life before…?
See less"Set in a futuristic world where humans are controlled by their fascist government, a career criminal gets drawn into a deadly plot when he rescues a upper class woman from the secret police and has to depend on her to survive."
What's her motive for wanting to take down a system in which she seems to be doing quite well? She's a member of the upper class; what's her skin in the game? Who's the protagonist: the criminal or the woman?
What’s her motive for wanting to take down a system in which she seems to be doing quite well? She’s a member of the upper class; what’s her skin in the game?
Who’s the protagonist: the criminal or the woman?
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