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In the throes of the Iraq war, a flight medic and his crew risk their lives to save injured soldiers and civilians alike.
As the others have said.The logline sets up an interesting situation for a plot, but, alas, it fails to follow through with a genuine plot.? Taken at face value, it promises an episodic narrative (aka: a string of pearls) where one damn thing (crisis) happens... and then another damn thing happens..Read more
As the others have said.
The logline sets up an interesting situation for a plot, but, alas, it fails to follow through with a genuine plot.? Taken at face value, it promises an episodic narrative (aka: a string of pearls) where one damn thing (crisis) happens… and then another damn thing happens… and then another.? And “one damn thing after another” is necessary for building a plot.? And all the damn things may be harrowing, full of jeopardy, conflict,.
But they ares not sufficient.? To what dramatic climax are all the “one damn things after another” building?? What is the overarching objective goal of the protagonist?
If you haven’t already done so, I suggest you try running your logline through the site’s logline generator..
See lessAfter a tragic death puts her family in financial jeopardy, a disgraced athlete partners with an old childhood friend to execute an insurance scheme that puts her on the wrong end of a revenge plot.
>>>After a tragic death puts her family in financial jeopardy,Who and how so? Because of medical bills not covered by insurance?? Please clarify. >>>disgraced athlete What kind of athlete? Basketball, football, or...?? Professional or...? >>>partners with an old childhoodRead more
>>>After a tragic death puts her family in financial jeopardy,Who and how so?
Because of medical bills not covered by insurance?? Please clarify.
>>>disgraced athlete
What kind of athlete? Basketball, football, or…?? Professional or…?
>>>partners with an old childhood friend to execute an insurance scheme that puts her on the wrong end of a revenge plot.
This sends mixed signals as to what is the story about.? What is the main dramatic question of the plot?? Is it about a scam or revenge?? If the latter, what does the insurance scam have to do with getting revenge?
The logline would benefit by being more specific and having a clearer focus. I suggest you run it through the logline generator app. The app is still in beta, but it’s a useful tool in shaping and sharpening a logline.
See lessWhen a disgraced schoolgirl is sent home, she finds her rural outback town dying. With everything hopeless, she sets about to remake the town, fighting with corrupt politicians, billionaire mining magnets and ?apathetic ?townspeople to create a prosperous future.
Great suggestion by yqwertz.? I would suggest the addition of one word:When she discovers an abandoned gold mine has contaminated the drinking water in her rural outback town, a disgraced school girl must expose the politicians who are covering it up before everyone falls ill.Something similar has aRead more
Great suggestion by yqwertz.? I would suggest the addition of one word:
When she discovers an abandoned gold mine has contaminated the drinking water in her rural outback town, a disgraced school girl must expose the politicians who are covering it up before everyone falls ill.
Something similar has actually happened in the rural Western community where I grew up.? Leachate of arsenic and? heavy metals into the river from an abandoned mine.? And it’s an? ongoing environmental hazard with abandoned mines all over the West.
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