1. Posted: June 25, 2019In:

    a young Hispanic man finds himself thrust into a nightmare when he begins working at a secluded orchard owned by an eccentric elderly couple, who plan on sacrificing him to their dark tree god.

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    So... a Latina Ripley is the host for a vegetable Alien.Taking the revised version literally, her objective goal is to escape (...she must struggle to escape...).? Which means she could escape -- but still die because? the seed is still inside her.Isn't her objective goal to "weed out"? the seed?? FRead more

    So… a Latina Ripley is the host for a vegetable Alien.

    Taking the revised version literally, her objective goal is to escape (…she must struggle to escape…).? Which means she could escape — but still die because? the seed is still inside her.

    Isn’t her objective goal to “weed out”? the seed?? Fleeing her tormentors is either a step toward getting rid of the seed or the denouement that would follow after “weeding” out the seed.? I don’t know the sequence you of events you have in mind.

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  2. Posted: June 25, 2019In:

    a young Hispanic man finds himself thrust into a nightmare when he begins working at a secluded orchard owned by an eccentric elderly couple, who plan on sacrificing him to their dark tree god.

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    >> but to plant a new tree someone has to ingest a seed and it will slowly grow inside you till it eventually bursts from within. the trees give fruit with the faces of its victims and when eaten this extends the life of the consumer. So he?s spiked with a seed in a meal they serve him and itRead more

    >> but to plant a new tree someone has to ingest a seed and it will slowly grow inside you till it eventually bursts from within. the trees give fruit with the faces of its victims and when eaten this extends the life of the consumer. So he?s spiked with a seed in a meal they serve him and it slowly grows through the story resulting in him going slowly mad and physically being drained…

    It seems to me that the seed is? the story hook of your story.? ?And I think it’s a good one.? It hooks my interest more than? some yada-yada about a human sacrifice to a tree.? So I suggest you, uh, “seed” and frame your logline? around what makes the seed peculiarly lethal..

    For some guidelines on how to frame an industry standard logline, check out “Our Formula“

    fwiw

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  3. Posted: June 25, 2019In:

    ? When a distraught chemist evades culpability for killing her overbearing boss during a heated argument, she must fend off a psychotic blackmailer?s escalating demands.

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    After accidentally killing her boss in a heated argument, a mentally disturbed woman must plot the cold blooded murder of the sole and equally unstable eyewitness when his blackmail demands escalate to death threats.(34 words)

    After accidentally killing her boss in a heated argument, a mentally disturbed woman must plot the cold blooded murder of the sole and equally unstable eyewitness when his blackmail demands escalate to death threats.

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