1. Posted: March 13, 2018In:

    Amid a sweltering summer, five different souls first encounter adulthood as gentrification alters their community.

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    >>>she?s a free spirit who remains a beacon of ?motivation? for my protagonistWhatever, it's your story.? But it's not a star-crossed story unless it seems fated to fail because they come from opposites sides of the track, economically and socially (as in "Romeo & Juliet).? Or fall in lRead more

    >>>she?s a free spirit who remains a beacon of ?motivation? for my protagonist

    Whatever, it’s your story.? But it’s not a star-crossed story unless it seems fated to fail because they come from opposites sides of the track, economically and socially (as in “Romeo & Juliet).? Or fall in love despite having clashing personality temperaments and opposing interests and beliefs about the central issue.? If he’s inspired by her, it should be because he wants to prove her wrong, convert her to his point of view. As she wants to prove him wrong, convert him to his point of view.?

    The best love stories are also arguments over the terms of endearment.

    fwiw

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  2. Posted: March 17, 2018In:

    When an archaeologist is killed by a god, a student in mythology finds out and goes on the journey to find the weapon that can kill gods, a grotesque monster made back by a medieval monastery father.

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    Agree with Richiev and Nir Shelter. >>> I come up with are either hard to pronounce or complicated My advice: KISS -- Keep it simple, screenwriter.

    Agree with Richiev and Nir Shelter.

    >>> I come up with are either hard to pronounce or complicated

    My advice: KISS — Keep it simple, screenwriter.

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  3. Posted: March 13, 2018In:

    When his memories of his late family are erased by the corrupt head of a tech company, a memory forger must use his skills to extract intel from a rival firm’s lead scientist to get them back.

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    >>>>it would more emotional if he were to received a message telling him that his father has finally died, but he can?t remember him Good idea for the inciting incident. When the bad guy wipes his memory -- that's backstory.? It isn't properly an inciting incident because it doesn't inciRead more

    >>>>it would more emotional if he were to received a message telling him that his father has finally died, but he can?t remember him

    Good idea for the inciting incident.

    When the bad guy wipes his memory — that’s backstory.? It isn’t properly an inciting incident because it doesn’t incite the protagonist to action,? The inciting incident is whatever happens that makes him realize he has? no memory of his parents.

    I see one problem with premise, however.? The protagonist lives in a society, a world where everyone has families, family connections, family,, family connections — it’s the homo sapien way.? How credible is it that he would not immediately wonder why he is the only one with no memories of every having a family. Wouldn’t it be better if the bad guy swaps out authentic memories with false ones — implants bogus memories?? (Like Rachel in “Blade Runner”)

    And then, he discovers intel about his real family….

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