The character is an interesting one with a lot of potential conflict outside the ring — if the story is set in the bad old days when there was no tolerance or acceptance of homosexuality in the sports world.  But there is no clue that such is the case. What is the time period of the story?

 

A more problematical issue is that the logline lack some required elements in an industry standard logline.  See the required elements outlined in the formula.

 

For one thing, the logline doesn’t provide the protagonist with an objective goal.  “Learning to accept himself and take pride in who he is” refers to his character arc — but a character arc is not a plot. A character arc is what unintentionally happens to the protagonist as a result of the plot.  And a plot is about the intentional pursuit of a concrete objective goal.  

 

Loglines are about the plot, not the character arc. “Learning to accept oneself and take pride” refer to subjective needs, not objective goals. But loglines are not about lessons to be unintentionally learned.  Loglines are about some concrete goal the protagonist intentionally pursues.

 

“Concrete objective” means that the goal is can be a visualized,  can be seen on the screen. Movies are a visual medium and every element in a logline needs to refer to something or someone that can be seen on the screen.  What is the visual for “learning to accept himself”?  What does “take pride” look like?

 

Rocky Balboa’s objective goal in the origin movie that launched the franchise is to remain standing at the end of 15 rounds.  That’s the visual: when the audience sees him on his feet at the end of 15 rounds, they know he’s succeeded.

 

What is you character’s objective goal?  Which is to say, what’s the visual that will let the audience know he has succeeded — or failed?

 

Hope this helps.