1. Posted: June 28, 2020In:

    In the depths of the depression, a small time con artist teams up with a seasoned pro to con $500,000 from a ruthless mobster to avenge the mobster’s murder of his mentor.

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    Nir: I believe it is more effective for the logline to specifically indicate the method for getting revenge, to wit, pull off a long con. As if there was another option given the characters' profession. But still.

    Nir:

    I believe it is more effective for the logline to specifically indicate the method for getting revenge, to wit, pull off a long con. As if there was another option given the characters’ profession. But still.

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  2. Posted: June 28, 2020In:

    A ruthless, power hungry politician must backstab, manipulate and kill those that oppose him to become the most powerful man in America

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    If "become the most powerful man in America" means he becomes President, then just say so, and save 6 words.

    If “become the most powerful man in America” means he becomes President, then just say so, and save 6 words.

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  3. Posted: June 23, 2020In:

    Massacres and mysterious disappearings are occuring in the Kabyle mountain regions of Algeria by a dangerous beast. A professional hunter is engaged by authorities to track down the creature and eliminate it, he will soon realize the task won’t be as simple as his previous achievements.

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    Richiev's version is an improvement.

    Richiev’s version is an improvement.

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