1. Posted: June 29, 2020In:

    In a bid to keep his job, a commitment-phobic womanizer seduces his boss’s wholesome daughter, but when she genuinely falls for him, he must continue the charade.

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    How will seducing the wholesome daughter get him on the good side of the boss? Seems like just the opposite would be the case, that the father would be outraged.

    How will seducing the wholesome daughter get him on the good side of the boss? Seems like just the opposite would be the case, that the father would be outraged.

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  2. Posted: June 29, 2020In:

    A young surveyor of planets, for the League of celestial nations, is sentenced to the Planet of Incarceration for entering a restricted area. He must discover why he was directed to the location and who authorised it.

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    What is the top secret event? (A logline can't reveal or describe all - but it must be specific, not vague. What makes the top secret event of urgent dramatic interest?) Why must he discover why he was set up? IOW: what are the stakes? What is gained if he find out? What is lost is he doesn't?

    What is the top secret event? (A logline can’t reveal or describe all – but it must be specific, not vague. What makes the top secret event of urgent dramatic interest?)

    Why must he discover why he was set up? IOW: what are the stakes? What is gained if he find out? What is lost is he doesn’t?

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  3. Posted: June 28, 2020In:

    After failing to deliver a kidnapped KGB defector to their Soviet handlers, a married couple of Russian sleeper agents must find a way to keep their captive secret from their Americanised kids, the suspicious FBI agent next door, and the American government that wants their asset back.

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    So what's the logline for the inciting incident as the FBI agent moving in? I view the FBI agent moving in as similar to Walter White's brother-in-law in "Breaking Bad" working for the DEA . It creates an ironic complication to be developed and paid off by the end of the series. Paid off: It's a CheRead more

    So what’s the logline for the inciting incident as the FBI agent moving in?

    I view the FBI agent moving in as similar to Walter White’s brother-in-law in “Breaking Bad” working for the DEA . It creates an ironic complication to be developed and paid off by the end of the series. Paid off: It’s a Chekhov gun plot gimmick that eventually will have to be fired — the FBI agent will eventually discover the truth as will Hank. And then…

    The children constitute another complication and Chekhov gun plant. Later or sooner, at least one of them is going to figure out what their parents really do. And then…

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