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A military bioweapons collector attempts to cover-up an accidental release of a deadly, new strain of flu by destroying the project’s hard drive before his Russian counterpart can prove the CIA’s involvement.
Re: >>>An Obeah Woman leads a bioweapons collector into the Ta?no ?Land of Souls? to find the cure for a deadly virus he helped createFor me the hook of the story, what grabs my attention, ?is that it is a redemption story: the man must find the solution to the problem he created. ?That's aRead more
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>>>An Obeah Woman leads a bioweapons collector into the Ta?no ?Land of Souls? to find the cure for a deadly virus he helped create
For me the hook of the story, what grabs my attention, ?is that it is a redemption story: the man must find the solution to the problem he created. ?That’s a strong selling point and that is where I would suggest focusing the logline.
The role of the woman while important to the full story is extraneous to the logline. ?And a distraction because, as I said in another thread, ?it is likely to leave most logline readers scratching their heads, having to google to find out who the “Obeah” are. ?Something a logline should never do. ?You only got 10 seconds to make the sale, and the clock doesn’t pause while they google.
See lessA cash strapped hit-woman, must confront the demons of her past, while juggling the bone crunching world of professional hits and the guardianship of her deceased sisters kids.
Writers are caught in a double-bind between text and subtext. ?The text is "We want something like 'Star Wars' or 'Die Hard'." ?The subtext is: "Only different."
Writers are caught in a double-bind between text and subtext. ?The text is “We want something like ‘Star Wars’ or ‘Die Hard’.” ?The subtext is: “Only different.”
See lessAn Obeah Woman leads a bioweapons collector into the Ta?no ?Land of Souls? to find the cure for a deadly virus he helped create
Who's the protagonist, the woman or the man? And who are the Obeah and where is Taino? ?Be specific --yes-- but with terms that don't leave a logline reader scratching his head or googling to find out the answer.
Who’s the protagonist, the woman or the man?
And who are the Obeah and where is Taino? ?Be specific –yes– but with terms that don’t leave a logline reader scratching his head or googling to find out the answer.
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