1. Posted: February 4, 2017In:

    EDIT: After her farm goes into foreclosure, a naive cowgirl falls in love with a misogynistic cowboy, only to find out that they both compete against each other for $100,000 at a rodeo event.

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    I like the poetry angle, too, if it involved a cowboy poetry contest -- that would be more authentic to the setting.But it's a stretch to believe that ?any poetry contest, whether cowboy or slam, ?in Montana or anywhere else, would have a grand prize greater than 4 figures, let alone a 6 figure prizRead more

    I like the poetry angle, too, if it involved a cowboy poetry contest — that would be more authentic to the setting.

    But it’s a stretch to believe that ?any poetry contest, whether cowboy or slam, ?in Montana or anywhere else, would have a grand prize greater than 4 figures, let alone a 6 figure prize. ?Poetry just doesn’t pay much anywhere.

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  2. Posted: February 4, 2017In:

    EDIT: After her farm goes into foreclosure, a naive cowgirl falls in love with a misogynistic cowboy, only to find out that they both compete against each other for $100,000 at a rodeo event.

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    savinh0:I like the idea of setting it Montana -- any place f-a-r removed from the fleshpots of modern life and what passes for Hollyweird's idea of a faux-idyllic rural setting.But who is?the target audience for this movie? ?If the protagonist is ?female, then the movie needs to appeal to women, rigRead more

    savinh0:

    I like the idea of setting it Montana — any place f-a-r removed from the fleshpots of modern life and what passes for Hollyweird’s idea of a faux-idyllic rural setting.

    But who is?the target audience for this movie? ?If the protagonist is ?female, then the movie needs to appeal to women, right? ?But I fear that women will be turned away by rather than attracted to and identifying with the female protagonist. ? What woman would want to see (another movie) about a woman who is too stupid to manage her own affairs and gullible enough to fall for a misogynist man?

    And if the protagonist is male, ?given that the genre is romance, the target audience will still be women. ?So even if she’s a supporting character, the same concern applies.

    Just saying.

    And what is the story behind the story that you really want to tell? ?Is there a particular reason you want to tell a romantic story set in Montana (as opposed to say, Wyoming, Idaho or Colorado) ?

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  3. Posted: February 4, 2017In:

    After his son confesses a murder to him, an obsessively upright police officer on the brink of a once in a lifetime promotion must use all his power and skills to destroy all evidence before the truth is uncovered.

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    What Nir Shelter said.?His actions ?seem to contradict how his character is defined whereas his actions should flow from how his character is defined.Now, if the story is about a man who always thought of himself and others have always thought of him as ?scrupulous in enforcing law and ?obsessive abRead more

    What Nir Shelter said.?His actions ?seem to contradict how his character is defined whereas his actions should flow from how his character is defined.

    Now, if the story is about a man who always thought of himself and others have always thought of him as ?scrupulous in enforcing law and ?obsessive about following proper procedure and then he discovers ?the perp is his son, his beloved son — well ?that’s a different dramatic issue and the logline should be revised to make that clear.

    But then why would his son dare to confess his crime to someone who has a reputation for being scrupulous? What is that about? ?Why can’t the officer discover ?that his son is the perp in the course of his investigation? ?And why can’t his promotion be contingent on his solving the crime? ?Which would intensify his dramatic predicament.

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