1. Posted: December 3, 2016In:

    PALEO When her boss at a wild game restaurant turns into a Neanderthal, a vegetarian waitress must solve the puzzle of evolution to escape with her life.

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    Only her boss? ?Wouldn't there be a stronger emotional motivation and higher stakes if he were her boyfriend?And she's "only" ?a vegetarian? ?Why not making her a vegan -- intensify a truly odd couple relationship. ?After all if you're digging for a vein of comedy, isn't an odd-couple romance the moRead more

    Only her boss? ?Wouldn’t there be a stronger emotional motivation and higher stakes if he were her boyfriend?

    And she’s “only” ?a vegetarian? ?Why not making her a vegan — intensify a truly odd couple relationship. ?After all if you’re digging for a vein of comedy, isn’t an odd-couple romance the mother lode?

    So maybe something like:

    When her fiancee devolves into a Neanderthal while celebrating his stag party at a wild game restaurant, his vegan bride-to-be has 24 hours to evolve him back into the man she wants to marry.
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    I think it’s okay to go with Neanderthal because, hey, it’s comedy, folks and ?while Homo neanderthalensis did evolve separately from Homo sapiens, there is genetic evidence of some pre-historic hanky-panky between the two species. ? So there’s you’re quasi-scientific basis for the twist in the story: come to find out, he has got some of those Neanderthal genes in his DNA.

    The back story could be: ?1] He had vowed to convert to veganism after the marriage — this was to be one last carnivorous orgy; ? or, 2] He had converted to vegan while dating her but, under the influence of booze, fell off the wagon; or 3]He had been pretending to be a vegan while courting her, and now the truth comes out.

    Whatever, I think this it’s a concept with commercial potential.

    fwiw

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  2. Posted: December 4, 2016In:

    This thriller follows the life of a genius African-American student, Brad, matriculating at MIT in the 1950?s. At MIT, the curse of his genius drags him into a governmental PR stunt to launch a nuclear missile at the moon in response to the Sputnik satellites ominously orbiting the Earth. When the Russians learn of the plan, his life is put in peril while a larger conspiracy emerges when his professor’s husband learns of their torrid affair.

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    At 76 words and 445 characters this logline needs considerable parrying in order to become an effective pitch of a script. ?Ideally the length of a logline should not exceed 25 words and fit into a twitter -- 140 characters.Please review "Training" at the top of the web page for some general guideliRead more

    At 76 words and 445 characters this logline needs considerable parrying in order to become an effective pitch of a script. ?Ideally the length of a logline should not exceed 25 words and fit into a twitter — 140 characters.

    Please review “Training” at the top of the web page for some general guidelines on composing a logline that conforms to industry expectations.

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  3. Posted: November 17, 2016In:

    After an obnoxious weatherman begrudgingly covers groundhog-day in Punxsutawney, he continuously wakes up to that same day, and must find a way out of the time-loop.

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    Dkpough1: Picking up the thread from "500 Days of Summer"?where you stated: >>>The goal is the reason for the story itself. Would you care to venture a logline for "Groundhog Day" that states the weatherman Phil's objective goal?

    Dkpough1:

    Picking up the thread from “500 Days of Summer”?where you stated:

    >>>The goal is the reason for the story itself.

    Would you care to venture a logline for “Groundhog Day” that states the weatherman Phil’s objective goal?

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