1. Posted: February 20, 2020In:

    When a sexually repressed teenage boy with a sex therapist mother is approached by his money savvy high school classmate, together they start a sex therapy business at school.

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    I take the heterodoxic position that the IMDB summary is good enough to serve as a pitching logline because it's? shorter and it sells the sizzle.? The posted logline, because it describes more of the steak could serve as a development logline.? (I guess; I haven't seen the series yet.)

    I take the heterodoxic position that the IMDB summary is good enough to serve as a pitching logline because it’s? shorter and it sells the sizzle.? The posted logline, because it describes more of the steak could serve as a development logline.? (I guess; I haven’t seen the series yet.)

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  2. Posted: February 20, 2020In:

    The unexpected arrival of young man claiming to be an estranged relative raises a family’s suspicions when a string of crimes rattles their community.

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    As the others said.And it's unclear who the protagonist is, the point of view character.? And what is the objective goal?

    As the others said.

    And it’s unclear who the protagonist is, the point of view character.? And what is the objective goal?

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  3. Posted: February 21, 2020In:

    An amnesiac warrior woman with a mysterious, magical tattoo that compels her to do things against her will teams up with a band of eccentric comrades on a quest to uncover the secret of her markings.

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    The protagonist should be proactive, the maker and mover of her own decisions and destiny -- not a puppet of some invisible force, the play thing of someone else's decisions.

    The protagonist should be proactive, the maker and mover of her own decisions and destiny — not a puppet of some invisible force, the play thing of someone else’s decisions.

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