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A reckless, arrogant young Jewish hospital messenger rescues his relatives from the liquidation of the ghetto and becomes the last leader of the Warsaw ghetto uprising.
NicolasJ:I thought so.MAREK EDELMAN!!!AWESOME!!? FANTASTIC!!!I've read about his historic struggle in the Warsaw ghetto.? The awful life-and-death decisions he had to make.? I am aware there's? a documentary about him.? I've long wondered why there has never been a movie.MAREK EDELMAN!!!Yes, yes, yoRead more
NicolasJ:
I thought so.
MAREK EDELMAN!!!
AWESOME!!? FANTASTIC!!!
I’ve read about his historic struggle in the Warsaw ghetto.? The awful life-and-death decisions he had to make.? I am aware there’s? a documentary about him.? I’ve long wondered why there has never been a movie.
MAREK EDELMAN!!!
Yes, yes, you must tell his story.
The logline should indicate that the story is “based upon” or “inspired by” a real historical person.? In fact, you can name him in the logline? — the singular exception to the rule that a logline should not have a proper name for the protagonist.
Drop the genre tag of “War” because a war story can be fictional. I suggest tagging it as a “biography” genre to clearly signal it really happened.? You’re not making this up.
As for interweaving two story lines, I don’t know.? Check out “The Imitation Game”, about as well done an interweaving of two story lines of two periods in the protagonist’s life as I’ve seen in recent years.
Whatever choice you make, the Warsaw ghetto story is the most compelling story line, the story hook.? It’s the story that will sell the script, sell tickets. It’s the one, the only one, that needs to be stated in the logline.
Very best wishes with your writing.? This is a film I want to see.
regards
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Reads like a knock off of "Breaking Bad".
Reads like a knock off of “Breaking Bad”.
See lessA wandering biker clinging to his small hometown makes the unfortunate decision to rob a bank after a chance encounter with another disgruntled soul. He must deal with his decisions while on the run from both his accomplice and the police.
Clarification:? Is the bank he robbed in his town?? (If not, then why is that info included in the logline.) Now then.? At 41 words, the logline is a bit too long; it can and should be trimmed.? In loglines, less is more. >>>"He must deal with his decisions" The phrase is vague, a generalizRead more
Clarification:? Is the bank he robbed in his town?? (If not, then why is that info included in the logline.)
Now then.? At 41 words, the logline is a bit too long; it can and should be trimmed.? In loglines, less is more.
>>>”He must deal with his decisions”
The phrase is vague, a generalization that can refer to any one of 1,001 things he has to deal with.? And if it can mean 1,001 things, then in a logline it means nothing.?? A logline needs to be concrete and specific.
So what specifically must he deal with?
And what’s the story hook?? What makes this story different from all the other stories about people who rob banks?
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