1. Posted: July 30, 2012In:

    Four friends with troubled pasts aquire stolen SWAT uniforms to raid drug houses. They are in over their heads with the local druglord when the cop who supplied the uniforms turns on them.

    drpun67

    Thanks for the compliment. Your input is appreciated and I like what you did there. I'm going to be submitting this script to the Tracking B contest in a couple days and they require a logline so this really helps.

    Thanks for the compliment. Your input is appreciated and I like what you did there. I’m going to be submitting this script to the Tracking B contest in a couple days and they require a logline so this really helps.

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  2. Posted: July 3, 2012In:

    A lonely young man gets caught up in the craziness of an exclusive nightclub that he discovers might be trafficking drugs but he soon falls head over heels for a quirky girl who is addicted to the club, the only way to save her and maybe himself is to bring it all down.

    drpun67

    I believe the hook is the fact that a regular guy is being drawn into a sinister club that may be front for drug trafficking and the girl he likes is already sucked in.

    I believe the hook is the fact that a regular guy is being drawn into a sinister club that may be front for drug trafficking and the girl he likes is already sucked in.

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  3. Posted: July 3, 2012In:

    A lonely young man gets caught up in the craziness of an exclusive nightclub that he discovers might be trafficking drugs but he soon falls head over heels for a quirky girl who is addicted to the club, the only way to save her and maybe himself is to bring it all down.

    drpun67

    she's addicted to being at the club all the time. She's also seen doing drugs but if she's not at the club it's like she's going through withdrawals.

    she’s addicted to being at the club all the time. She’s also seen doing drugs but if she’s not at the club it’s like she’s going through withdrawals.

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