1. Posted: October 24, 2017In:

    Novel: A french teenager runs away to fulfill his dream of becoming an actor in L.A.

    Fandango1980 Logliner

    Hi Jumeriot! This is my second reply on a posted logline, so keep that in mind and I just want to help. Great! But why is this a great story to tell? What stands in his way? What happens? if he is gets there and doesn't find a job as an actor? How will he figurative die if he does not fulfill his drRead more

    Hi Jumeriot!

    This is my second reply on a posted logline, so keep that in mind and I just want to help.

    Great!
    But why is this a great story to tell? What stands in his way? What happens? if he is gets there and doesn’t find a job as an actor? How will he figurative die if he does not fulfill his dream?

    Let us know!

    Thanks,

    Aschwin

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  2. Posted: October 24, 2017In:

    A mother to two clone children plans for more clone children, but she must make the world a place where they can survive, so she unleashes her ability to kill using only her brain, founding a world of potent and fertile.

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    Fandango1980 Logliner

    Hi Rhea, Thank you for sharing your logline with us. This is for me also the first time to comment on another logline... I really try to understand what you want to tell with this logline. A logline needs 3 things: 1. A protoganist 2. A goal. 3. An antagonist force that stands in its way As I undersRead more

    Hi Rhea,

    Thank you for sharing your logline with us.
    This is for me also the first time to comment on another logline…

    I really try to understand what you want to tell with this logline.
    A logline needs 3 things:
    1. A protoganist
    2. A goal.
    3. An antagonist force that stands in its way

    As I understand thus far is that a mother with two clone children wants to have save a environment for them, which is understandable, but what stands in her way to get to that place?
    and her lover not really relevant in her logline as i can see it now.

    Hope this helps.

    Thanks,

    Aschwin

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  3. Posted: August 31, 2017In:

    When a desilliusioned crusader returns home to his wife and finds out that she has been absorbed by hell, he needs to get her out there before her soul becomes lost.

    Fandango1980 Logliner

    Well, if you look at the series Supernatural everything is possible. :) This is more based on the story of Dante with the divine comedy. Anyways i was more interested if the logline is technically correct.

    Well, if you look at the series Supernatural everything is possible. 🙂
    This is more based on the story of Dante with the divine comedy.
    Anyways i was more interested if the logline is technically correct.

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