Hi All,

Thank you all for reviewing my logline.
Due to your questions I can make up the logline is not clear, hopefully?you can help me making a good logline. 🙂
My question is actually does it really need to be a human, alien or monster? Can the antagonist also be a thing? Like a land or time?

Herewith ?a little background on the story.
This is a harsh and uptight business man who neglects his family because he is to involved with his business.
By accident the grim reaper takes him to the land of the dead, it is not scary land its actually a world where there is normal life.
In this land he runs into ?persons and things and need to learn about the real values of life.

So here a revised logline:
An uptight business man that neglects his family winds up in the land of the dead and must find a way out or risks losing his life.

I hope to hear you soon!

Kind Regards,

Aschwin