1. Posted: March 8, 2017In:

    A flawed, discarded Android rises from a salvage heap to battle a powerful Federation of Androids bent on the extermination of the human race.

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    An "obsolete android" may read better, yet isn't really unique. I would also recommend dropping "a powerful federation of androids" since we already mention android once already, and then replacing this antagonistic force with a different adjective. Would need to know more about the story to suggestRead more

    An “obsolete android” may read better, yet isn’t really unique. I would also recommend dropping “a powerful federation of androids” since we already mention android once already, and then replacing this antagonistic force with a different adjective. Would need to know more about the story to suggest one, however.

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  2. Posted: March 6, 2017In:

    ?A cop and his K-9 companion unintentionally hijack a billion dollar drug shipment from a ruthless cartel that will stop at nothing to get it back.

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    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    Or:?After seizing a truck load of drugs, a rogue cop must fight his way out of a corrupt city before a merciless cartel hunts him down.?

    Or:

    ?After seizing a truck load of drugs, a rogue cop must fight his way out of a corrupt city before a merciless cartel hunts him down.?

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  3. Posted: March 6, 2017In:

    ?A cop and his K-9 companion unintentionally hijack a billion dollar drug shipment from a ruthless cartel that will stop at nothing to get it back.

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    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    How about: A rogue cop commanders a shipment of drugs from a corrupt politician which he then uses to trade for his life and also the life of his girlfriend.

    How about:

    A rogue cop commanders a shipment of drugs from a corrupt politician which he then uses to trade for his life and also the life of his girlfriend.

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