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After being lost at sea in the Bermuda Triangle and then finding themselves in an otherworldly gallery of paintings that become portals to strange worlds and other dimensions, will an unlikely group of teen misfits be able to band together long enough to find the door that leads them home, or will the sinister evil that brought them to this new reality keep them entrapped there forever?
I knew it needed to be tightened up, but wasn't sure where to begin, so thanks for your input.
I knew it needed to be tightened up, but wasn’t sure where to begin, so thanks for your input.
See lessWhen a priest is faced with the choice to either save his nieces life or uphold the laws of his religion the devil himself appears to tell him that everything he thought he knew about god and the devil was a lie to begin with.
I agree with most of dpg's unpacking of your story; except that, without knowing why the priest can't both save his niece and follow the rules of his religion (is there an inciting incident that would clarify that) or even what is the priest's religion, then how can we be sure that the devil here isRead more
I agree with most of dpg’s unpacking of your story; except that, without knowing why the priest can’t both save his niece and follow the rules of his religion (is there an inciting incident that would clarify that) or even what is the priest’s religion, then how can we be sure that the devil here is truly the antagonist? Furthermore, you have the devil appearing after the priest finds himself in the dilemma of choosing his niece or his religion, so isn’t the real struggle with the priest himself (perhaps with his faith or his own character). Finally, if the god and the devil you are writing about is actually God and Satan, then the devil wouldn’t call himself a liar, but if he did, then the priest would not be confused by that statement, because he would already know and understand the character of the devil.
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