1. Posted: February 5, 2018In:

    A young female werecat discovers she is in love with her best friend while trying to prevent the end of the world.

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    what its putting the world in risk? maybe the movie is about confront that specific conflict, Wich is the major event? Also if the love story its not directly implicated in the conflict or the goal its the "B" story, so maybe the logline should focus on the conflict, the goal and the stakes. It coulRead more

    what its putting the world in risk? maybe the movie is about confront that specific conflict, Wich is the major event?
    Also if the love story its not directly implicated in the conflict or the goal its the “B” story, so maybe the logline should focus on the conflict, the goal and the stakes. It could have a structure like: When “a major event puts the world in risk”,? a female werecat and her best friend must confront (an enemy, antagonist) to save the world.

    With your logline its very difficult to figure out what the film its about, the end of the world could be a war, a meteorite or an enemy.

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  2. Posted: February 2, 2018In:

    When the daughter of a retired police officer is kidnapped by the son of an innocent man whom he sent to the death row, he must find the true culprit in order to obtain the release of her daughter before the day of the execution.

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    Thank you for the feedback! Thats very useful, it must be a short amount of time! Love the idea of the prosecuting attorney! It's very important in the story and it's other kind of enemy so the good guy must work very hard and find different ways to reaveal the truth. Save his daughter and free thatRead more

    Thank you for the feedback!

    Thats very useful, it must be a short amount of time!

    Love the idea of the prosecuting attorney! It’s very important in the story and it’s other kind of enemy so the good guy must work very hard and find different ways to reaveal the truth. Save his daughter and free that man it’s not going to be easy even if he get the clues needed.

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  3. Posted: February 1, 2018In:

    When an idealistic boy tired of bullying establishes a secret club of victims to impart justice, some members of the group begin to turn into very dangerous bullies.

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    Thank you very much for the feedback! variable, i always thought about the protagonist to be part of bullied ones, but its not clear in the logline. Now it also makes me think about that the protagonist could be some kind of vocational justice boy. Could be also a interesting perspective. I must incRead more

    Thank you very much for the feedback!

    variable, i always thought about the protagonist to be part of bullied ones, but its not clear in the logline. Now it also makes me think about that the protagonist could be some kind of vocational justice boy. Could be also a interesting perspective. I must include hint of his age. I need to find a conflict that make clear personal stakes.

    dpg you are totally right!? I think i wrote it because i thougt it was a interesting reversal, but its just that reversal that happens in the middle of the story.

    Now i read the logline and i see, i dont have the inciting incident that push the protagonist to found the club, so i dont have a clear special conflict, just a routine conflict. I must build better the conflict and that generates a clear intentional goal!i have to make it more personal!

    Thank you! Im going to try to update it!

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