1. Posted: January 20, 2020In:

    Liberal Cardinal Bergoglio tries to convince Pope Benedict XVI to accept his resignation, unaware the conservative pontiff is sizing up his harshest critic to lead the Catholic Church after his shock departure.

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    I feel like this needs rewording. It's hard to get past the 'Frustrated and liberal' part. It is important to say both of things together like that? Maybe just put 'frustrated'.

    I feel like this needs rewording. It’s hard to get past the ‘Frustrated and liberal’ part. It is important to say both of things together like that? Maybe just put ‘frustrated’.

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  2. Posted: February 14, 2020In:

    When a sacred family heirloom goes missing, a devoted widow is stalked by a deranged young woman who believes that she took the emblem and she viciously sets out to retrieve what might be rightfully hers.

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    This sounds like a thriller. Maybe take out 'she viciously' because she's described as deranged so one would think that she's already going to go about it in a crazy and/or scary way.

    This sounds like a thriller. Maybe take out ‘she viciously’ because she’s described as deranged so one would think that she’s already going to go about it in a crazy and/or scary way.

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  3. Posted: January 19, 2020In:

    Convinced by a gimmicky sweepstakes letter that he?s won $1,000,000, a booze-addled old man talks his skeptical son into driving him 800 miles to Lincoln, Nebraka to claim his prize.

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    I like this. I'd watch it.

    I like this. I’d watch it.

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