1. Posted: September 25, 2012In:

    While out on a date – a young; confident; and carefree girl comes across the most addictive of aromas. She follows it like a drug only to be lead to a dead body. Now her morals are at war with her new found obsession – She's addicted to the smell of death.

    henry

    Jim isn't your version like a teaser? just the last part of it because your stating a question the log line is meant to tell the whole in a few lines not leave us with guesses.

    Jim isn’t your version like a teaser? just the last part of it because your stating a question the log line is meant to tell the whole in a few lines not leave us with guesses.

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  2. Posted: October 4, 2012In:

    After she is imbued with the power to kill with a touch, a grieving farmer must stop a trio of fundamentalists intent on recruiting her as the fourth "horseperson" of the apocalypse before they can end life on Earth.

    henry

    I really like this idea but what is the drive to save the world? because she is grieving, not sure about that.

    I really like this idea but what is the drive to save the world? because she is grieving, not sure about that.

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  3. Posted: September 23, 2012In:

    Marple Lane is a mystery adventure set in a house owned by a recently deceased famous crime author and follows Margaret, a reclusive widow who, when she starts receiving letters addressed to the main character of the author’s novel, must help a desperate fan solve the mystery of her family’s disappearance before those responsible stop her.

    henry

    I assume that "Marple Lane" is the title, you don't need that in a log line, you should start introducing the main character right away. E.g. if it were the main character was the Author, A Famous Crime Author Follows . .. . so and so. you want to grab the attention of the person your pitching it toRead more

    I assume that “Marple Lane” is the title, you don’t need that in a log line, you should start introducing the main character right away. E.g. if it were the main character was the Author, A Famous Crime Author Follows . .. . so and so. you want to grab the attention of the person your pitching it to.

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