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After losing his military post and falling into a terrifying curse, an ex-soldier travels to the place where he will find his deliverance and the way to the lost city of Elyon, which will save the people of the world of Dunya.
1. Since Elyon and Dunya are unfamiliar fantasy realms – a world setup may help e.g. In a world ruled by… 2. Appears the curse is your inciting incident; it may help to state what kind of curse this vet needs to break. 3. You need a baddie, someone/thing preventing him from achieving the goal. 4. OnRead more
1. Since Elyon and Dunya are unfamiliar fantasy realms – a world setup may help e.g. In a world ruled by…
2. Appears the curse is your inciting incident; it may help to state what kind of curse this vet needs to break.
3. You need a baddie, someone/thing preventing him from achieving the goal.
4. Once he achieves deliverance, why HIM to save the world?
Example of what I can see:
“A cursed veteran sets out on a journey to a mystical lost city for deliverance, but…”
Keep going, take care.
See lessThis story puts us in the shoes of Lena, a young mixed race, who dreams of becoming the best sorceress in the kingdom. However, there is a problem, the mestizos are not well received. Luckily, Lena does not give up easily and will do everything possible to achieve her dream.
Sounds interesting! Added “cabal” as her group to be prejudice against or kept as mixed-race, also gave her a goal once she achieves her dreams – make this yours. Example: "An aspiring sorceress must overcome cabal prejudices in order to gain the skills to save her kingdom" OR "An aspiring mixed-racRead more
Sounds interesting!
Added “cabal” as her group to be prejudice against or kept as mixed-race, also gave her a goal once she achieves her dreams – make this yours.
Example:
“An aspiring sorceress must overcome cabal prejudices in order to gain the skills to save her kingdom”
OR
“An aspiring mixed-race sorceress must overcome prejudices in order to gain the skills to save her kingdom”
Keep going, take care.
See less“A working-class wizard and his assistant help a girl rescue her friend who is being held captive by a voodoo priestess during Mardi Gras in New Orleans.”
Dig it! The damsel in distress and needing a rescue appears to be a friend of a friend, so I wrote up an example of her being more prominent – make this your own. Example: “A working-class wizard and his apprentice set out during Mardi Gras to rescue the mayor held captive by a New Orleans voodoo prRead more
Dig it!
The damsel in distress and needing a rescue appears to be a friend of a friend, so I wrote up an example of her being more prominent – make this your own.
Example:
“A working-class wizard and his apprentice set out during Mardi Gras to rescue the mayor held captive by a New Orleans voodoo priestess.”
Hope this helps, take care.
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