1. Posted: August 1, 2012In:

    When a small club owner finds out his wife is cheating with one of his young bartenders, he hires a conniving hitman and we discover that in Texas, nothing is simple…

    The Doctor

    Thanks gman, interesting points! I'm not sure about the club, I kind of feel it establishes a connection to the bartender which is nice. I really see what you mean about the punchline missing a joke, I tried to avoid Texas popping up twice as it's something of an awkward word but a set up is severelRead more

    Thanks gman, interesting points!

    I’m not sure about the club, I kind of feel it establishes a connection to the bartender which is nice.

    I really see what you mean about the punchline missing a joke, I tried to avoid Texas popping up twice as it’s something of an awkward word but a set up is severely lacking.

    Even just a changing “small” to “Simple, rural” or something would give it more punch(line)

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