Thank you for your elaborate answer dpg! It’s much appreciated.

The outline for the story is this (and please bear with me; english is not my first language):

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In the yet-to-be-named hometown of said lawyer there’s an old petroleum refinery on it’s last legs. The refinery has been the major industrial complex in the area over the years and the livelihood of many families in and around the town.

As an act of kindness the son of the founder of the plant, which is the CEO of the company referred to earlier as the lawyer’s top-client, is giving company-owned land back to the community as a part of the dismantling of the plant.

As if that wasn’t enough, the kind gentleman of said company is also putting millions in an educational fund, encouraging the community to progress and move forward. A true hero. All is good.

There’s a catch, though. Corporate documents hold information regarding leaking underground storage tanks. By estimations made by experts, within the corporation, the leaking tanks will have to be addressed within two years. If not, the leaking tanks are highly likely to poison the only groundwater reservoirs in town and the same experts’ calculations have figures in the hundreds of millions to make the water safe.

If the documents are kept a secret, ten years down the road the place will most likely be uninhabitable.

The lawyer is sent to mediate and negotiate the terms of the “gift” and make sure the soon-to-be-contaminated land is in the ownership of the good people of the town. He is after all “one of them”.

This negotiation is the dealbreaker for the lawyer to make the youngest senior partner in the history of the firm. It’s also, by far, the greatest fee in the history of the firm. Something that will make them kings of the hill.

By accident the lawyer overhears a conversation about “The Document”.

Should he investigate further and possibly break the deal? What does he owe the town he left almost twenty years ago?

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Does that make sense? Is it interesting/plausible enough to expand on?

Hello everyone!

New here, but been lurking around for a while. Don’t feel confident enough to comment on other loglines, but would love to in the future.

I feel this one might be a bit vague, myself. It’s a logline for a graphical novel / short story, basically.

Here’s a few variations:

A ruthless, self-centered, corporate lawyer is stuck between a rock and a hard place when assigned to represent the firm?s top client against his hometown.?

The loyalty of a ruthless, self-centered, big-city corporate lawyer is tested to the limit when assigned to represent the firm?s top client against his rural hometown.?

Would love some feedback. I’m a big enough boy to be able to handle it. Fire away.