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Gerald Tinkers rise to track and football stardom as told through his mothers? eyes, culminates with a gold medal in the ?72 Munich Olympics.
I don't think we need the name (unless it's someone famous), and I don't know how "football" fits in with the Olympic dream. Also, why tell the story from the mother's perspective if she's not an active part of the story (if that's really what you're going for, how about something like "After beingRead more
I don’t think we need the name (unless it’s someone famous), and I don’t know how “football” fits in with the Olympic dream. Also, why tell the story from the mother’s perspective if she’s not an active part of the story (if that’s really what you’re going for, how about something like “After being abandoned (widowed?) by her husband, a poor, single mother pushes her reluctant son to greatness and is redeemed when he wins gold at the ’72 Olympics.”).
Or if it’s really Gerald’s story…what is his drive, what is his fault, what obstacles must he overcome (maybe his nagging mother?)?
See lessMiami Air ramp-service personal engage in the systematic looting of airport luggage and merchandize, which leads to the death of eight ?Ramp Rats? and the arrest of sixty-three other luggage handlers and airport personnel.
I don't think we need the "Miami Air" or "Ramp-Rats" in the logline. Also, as mentioned by other commenters, there doesn't seem to be a protagonist that is actively involved in the story. Maybe something like "When valuables start disappearing from luggage, a slacker airport security chief must plunRead more
I don’t think we need the “Miami Air” or “Ramp-Rats” in the logline. Also, as mentioned by other commenters, there doesn’t seem to be a protagonist that is actively involved in the story.
Maybe something like “When valuables start disappearing from luggage, a slacker airport security chief must plunge into the dangerous underground world of luggage handlers and solve the case before the body count starts to rise.” Well, that’s not great either, but you get the gist…
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