1. Posted: July 11, 2018In:

    When his unknown opponent suffers a brain haemorrhage in the ring at a local tournament, a rookie fighter must discover the boxer’s identity and find his family to gift his prize money to them.

    Jessie Samurai

    I feel, like I'd like to hear more about the journey and the obstacles there. Other than? not knowing where to find the family. At the moment, I'm picturing someone taking a flight, checking in in a youth hostel?and knocking at random doors.

    I feel, like I’d like to hear more about the journey and the obstacles there. Other than? not knowing where to find the family. At the moment, I’m picturing someone taking a flight, checking in in a youth hostel?and knocking at random doors.

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  2. Posted: July 10, 2018In:

    2112: the government is about to destroy a city?s ability for deep emotion, an outcast telepath must trade in her beloved, to rescue someone murdered in the past to start an uprising.

    Jessie Samurai

    Which part of it would you guys cut?

    Which part of it would you guys cut?

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  3. Posted: April 30, 2018In:

    In a last attempt to prove himself, a washed-up detective must unravel the secrets of a small-town to find two missing children.

    Jessie Samurai

    I think what?s happening is that you are mixing up two different formats. You?re pretty close, but a logline benefits from following a very specific structure. Just check back with the formula. Know whee to find it? What you wrote is more something you?d read in a tv magazine or so. Which is ok forRead more

    I think what?s happening is that you are mixing up two different formats. You?re pretty close, but a logline benefits from following a very specific structure. Just check back with the formula. Know whee to find it?
    What you wrote is more something you?d read in a tv magazine or so. Which is ok for that purpose, but a different thing again.

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