1. Posted: February 14, 2013In:

    When an honest high school football star kills a young woman while driving drunk, his morals are put to the test when those he respects cover up the crime.

    kconnor111 Penpusher

    I like the word honorable instead of honest.

    I like the word honorable instead of honest.

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  2. Posted: February 13, 2013In:

    Dean, a small-town charmer, bravely leaves his home for the bright lights of Los Angeles, only to be greeted by sex, lies and deceit. OR In pursuit of his dreams, can a small-town charmer overcome the temptations in a city he doesn?t belong in or will he become another casualty of L.A.?

    kconnor111 Penpusher

    Thanks for pointing our charmer. It should actually be dreamer (he is a charmer but doesn't know it), but dreamer is the best word. He is moving to LA to become an actor and escape from the small town redundancy (live his dreams basically). I had an agent review my first logline and I had the word aRead more

    Thanks for pointing our charmer. It should actually be dreamer (he is a charmer but doesn’t know it), but dreamer is the best word. He is moving to LA to become an actor and escape from the small town redundancy (live his dreams basically). I had an agent review my first logline and I had the word actor in it (move to LA to become an actor) and she said NO ONE wants to make a show about actors so don’t put that in the logline. Since the acting aspect isn’t the main focus of the show, she said not to include it.

    Thanks for the feedback. I’ll revise and repost.

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