1. Posted: November 1, 2012In:

    Tired of losing and hearing his organization bashed on sports talk radio, the owner of a pro hockey team hires the local station’s most vocal caller to run the team.

    Erik

    No, the caller-turned-GM is the lead character. I guess the logline should focus on him?

    No, the caller-turned-GM is the lead character. I guess the logline should focus on him?

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  2. Posted: November 1, 2012In:

    There is a company that can reset your life. If you don't feel like you have succeed in life you can just reset your life.

    Erik

    I immediately thought of two stories: Eternal Sunshine and Groundhog Day. Include enough information to distinguish your story from the others that it might slightly resemble.

    I immediately thought of two stories: Eternal Sunshine and Groundhog Day. Include enough information to distinguish your story from the others that it might slightly resemble.

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  3. Posted: November 2, 2012In:

    With an entire school held captive, a doctor must relive a traumatic childhood that may solve the mystery behind the sadistic madman that threatens his daughter's life.

    Erik

    Intriguing, but it would probably hook me more if I got a small hint about how the doctor, his childhood and the madman are connected. This implies that they are, but it's very vague. Try to give away enough to get people really interested, without giving away too much.

    Intriguing, but it would probably hook me more if I got a small hint about how the doctor, his childhood and the madman are connected. This implies that they are, but it’s very vague. Try to give away enough to get people really interested, without giving away too much.

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