Hi there
I think D Forde is also same old lol but ‘deeper and denser” too haha
They meet in the city where we show him as the fish out of water and then she gets in the truck and he sings to her and she’s “in love” lol and then it’s all systems go. But …… he’s got to learn to love his estranged son before he can even think about loving a woman …. and that’s his life-changing event (B story) ….. to ultimately get the girl …..
Thanks 🙂

Hi guys, thank you all so much for your comments. It’s given me lots to think about.
Russell, you?re right ? 90-year-olds do fall in love! Why her specifically? I have some corny ideas about kismet moments and reminders of a dead lover ??.. but I?m not sure beyond that.
Paul, thanks, your suggested logline is so much better than mine in capturing what the story is about.
Nir, I have given some thought to your questions and perhaps ‘taking responsibility’ is not the main flaw that he has to deal with (but is a secondary flaw maybe). The cause and effect is that he wants her love but he can’t even love his own son so he needs to be able to?love (and take responsibility for) his own flesh and blood before he can truly love anyone else (otherwise it’s just self-absorbed, selfish ‘love’.) How that could look could be taking his son on the road with him (maybe to help him with a job and get him away from drugs/foster care) rather than ignoring his son and obsessing about getting the girl on the road. So maybe, something along these lines ?

When a self-absorbed long-haul trucker falls for a big city writer, he must learn to love and include his estranged son in his world, before he can win her heart.

?To win the heart of a big city writer by getting her to fall in love with the road, a self-absorbed long-haul trucker must first learn to love and take responsibility for his estranged son by including him in his world.