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  1. Posted: August 23, 2020In: Coming of Age

    As the end of school assembly approaches, six-year-old Michael elicits the help of his older sister to prove autism can’t stop potential.

    Mike Pedley Singularity
    Added an answer on August 23, 2020 at 5:44 am

    How are they going to do that? A logline needs to give the reader a clear and concise summary of the plot up to either the midpoint or the beginning of the final act and set out a clear goal. It must be a visual goal, something we can see on screen, and you need to tell us, specifically, what that iRead more

    How are they going to do that? A logline needs to give the reader a clear and concise summary of the plot up to either the midpoint or the beginning of the final act and set out a clear goal. It must be a visual goal, something we can see on screen, and you need to tell us, specifically, what that is.

    We don’t need names in a logline. It adds nothing. What is very important here is that the reader understands that Michael has autism. Currently, there is nothing that states this. It is hinted at perhaps, but it’s never a good idea to let the reader assume something. Especially if it’s something as fundamental as your protagonist’s defining characteristic and the most important thing to understand about him.

    We also need the inciting incident. What key event kicked this story in motion? Was it Michael’s isolation, or his sister’s discovery of it? Based on the information you’ve written below (NB/ never rely on this bit of additional text to tell us the story. If it’s that important, it should be in the logline) I would say it sounds more like the sister is the protagonist. She is possibly better placed to be the eyes the audience views the story through.

    I really like the idea behind this, so I hope this helps.

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  2. Posted: August 21, 2020In: Coming of Age

    To win the affections of the dean’s daughter, a bad boy rich kid has until graduation to get accepted into a snooty club, in order to prove his worth.

    Mike Pedley Singularity
    Replied to answer on August 21, 2020 at 9:20 pm

    8% is a pretty good success rate! If 8% of your scripts get made you're doing ok haha.

    8% is a pretty good success rate! If 8% of your scripts get made you’re doing ok haha.

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  3. Posted: August 21, 2020In: Coming of Age

    To win the affections of the dean’s daughter, a bad boy rich kid has until graduation to get accepted into a snooty club, in order to prove his worth.

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    Mike Pedley Singularity
    Added an answer on August 21, 2020 at 9:20 pm

    Does the Dean's daughter not get a say? It hasn't been established that she falls for him too, so, in a post #MeToo era, I feel like it needs to be 100% clear that it's mutual right from the start. I like the idea, I just feel like there needs to be more to it to make it stand out from the other simRead more

    Does the Dean’s daughter not get a say? It hasn’t been established that she falls for him too, so, in a post #MeToo era, I feel like it needs to be 100% clear that it’s mutual right from the start.

    I like the idea, I just feel like there needs to be more to it to make it stand out from the other similar 80s/80s style rom-coms.

    Maybe his goal could be to get accepted into an elite social club, not dissimilar to him joining a fraternity but it’s all posh stuff that they make him do. The preppy ex could be on the selection committee. The guy gets accepted in the end, but since films like this always need a positive message, once he’s accepted he finds out the uptight Dean did something similar to win over his wife’s father back in the day. The Dean then reconnects with his youth, telling this kid to be himself. The simple fact he was prepared to go to such lengths, and the same lengths he went to himself, shows just how much he cares about his daughter.

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