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A homeless man commits suicide, resurrects as Christ the Lord, and takes his revenge against a racist homicidal police force.
Yeah it works better, but he doesn't commit suicide knowing he'll be resurrected. Plus, I thought suicide was frowned upon in pretty much all religions? With that in mind, why isn't he killed by the police? Much stronger. Whether I personally agree philosophically isn't really the issue, it's whetheRead more
Yeah it works better, but he doesn’t commit suicide knowing he’ll be resurrected. Plus, I thought suicide was frowned upon in pretty much all religions? With that in mind, why isn’t he killed by the police? Much stronger.
Whether I personally agree philosophically isn’t really the issue, it’s whether your idea is considered marketable by producers.
See lessWhen his father, gunned down by terrorists, dies on her operating table, an atheist cryogenecist and an orphaned catholic doctor partake in a near death expermiment searching for proof of an afterlife.
The relationship between the inciting incident and the goal is unclear. These two things must be related. Think of them like a question and an answer - What do you do when a huge shark starts eating the locals? You try and kill the shark. Yours currently is something like "What do you do when your fRead more
The relationship between the inciting incident and the goal is unclear. These two things must be related. Think of them like a question and an answer – What do you do when a huge shark starts eating the locals? You try and kill the shark. Yours currently is something like “What do you do when your father is killed by terrorists? You play around with near death experiments in the search for an afterlife.” There’s a connection, sure, but it’s loose. It needs to be tight!
“When his father […] dies on her operating table…” – his? or hers? Who is who? It’s really important for the logline to make sense and the reader to understand the relationships and characters within the story.
Have you seen Flatliners?
See lessA homeless man commits suicide, resurrects as Christ the Lord, and takes his revenge against a racist homicidal police force.
Revenge for who? Based on your logline, the police have done nothing to this homeless guy so why is he getting revenge? Jesus Christ does not get revenge... that's not how he rolls. I'm pretty sure somebody wrote a book about that a while ago. Why does he have to come back as Jesus anyway? Why pissRead more
Revenge for who? Based on your logline, the police have done nothing to this homeless guy so why is he getting revenge?
Jesus Christ does not get revenge… that’s not how he rolls. I’m pretty sure somebody wrote a book about that a while ago.
Why does he have to come back as Jesus anyway? Why piss off everyone who worships him with something they would/consider blasphemous when he could be resurrected as simply himself but with a mission??
Films about race MUST have a protagonist whose life is impacted by racism. Cause and effect. If this homeless guy was black and he was the victim of police brutality, then his resurrection and subsequent vendetta against the police would be justified. I’m not sure how well this idea would be received in the current climate though.
Hope this helps.
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