1. Posted: March 12, 2013In:

    To overcome her performance anxiety, a renowned classical pianist pursues an anonymous affair with a man who is sharply skilled at erotic knife-play.

    milesmaker

    Thanks so much for your 'facing fear to fight fear' comment. It's influencing me to alter this logline to suggest your observation and mmckean's question above. So what if the logline read, "To overcome her fear of performing, a renowned classical pianist pursues an anonymous affair with a man who iRead more

    Thanks so much for your ‘facing fear to fight fear’ comment. It’s influencing me to alter this logline to suggest your observation and mmckean’s question above.

    So what if the logline read,
    “To overcome her fear of performing, a renowned classical pianist pursues an anonymous affair with a man who is sharply skilled at erotic knife-play.”
    ?

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  2. Posted: March 12, 2013In:

    To overcome her performance anxiety, a renowned classical pianist pursues an anonymous affair with a man who is sharply skilled at erotic knife-play.

    milesmaker

    I love those questions! Watching the movie answers them. Loglines are supposed to present the problem and/or the situation, but not spell it all out for you--or why see the movie? If the setup intrigues or compels you enough you'll consider watching the movie to see how it all plays out. This is allRead more

    I love those questions! Watching the movie answers them. Loglines are supposed to present the problem and/or the situation, but not spell it all out for you–or why see the movie? If the setup intrigues or compels you enough you’ll consider watching the movie to see how it all plays out. This is all you’re gonna get with a 1-sentence logline and I see far too many that are far too long.

    I’m also hoping people can imagine the pressure a renowned classical pianist faces, which hopefully communicates the ‘big and important’

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  3. Posted: March 12, 2013In:

    To overcome her performance anxiety, a renowned classical pianist pursues an anonymous affair with a man who is sharply skilled at erotic knife-play.

    milesmaker

    Thanks for your feedback mmckean. If I remove the fact she's a pianist, it will simply look like a woman simply pursues an anonymous affair--but why, and what makes that a movie? Being that the pressures of her profession have a lot do with her motivation, I'll consider changing the logline to, "ToRead more

    Thanks for your feedback mmckean. If I remove the fact she’s a pianist, it will simply look like a woman simply pursues an anonymous affair–but why, and what makes that a movie? Being that the pressures of her profession have a lot do with her motivation, I’ll consider changing the logline to, “To overcome her fear of performing, a renowned concert pianist…”

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