1. Posted: April 24, 2012In: ,

    While posing as a street person at night to scam people, a conniving ad executive is faced with his greatest fears when he loses everything and becomes homeless himself!

    morley

    Thank you for your feedback. A shout out goes to Geno at www.thescriptmentor.com for suggesting I re-work my old log line. In fact, they actually gave me detailed notes on the first 10 pages of my screenplay at no cost.

    Thank you for your feedback. A shout out goes to Geno at http://www.thescriptmentor.com for suggesting I re-work my old log line. In fact, they actually gave me detailed notes on the first 10 pages of my screenplay at no cost.

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  2. Posted: April 12, 2012In:

    During a rich Horror Writer's night away of drinking with two friends, each tells a story which is played out, while his greedy wife defectively conjures a demon to murder him. Meanwhile, two demon hunting steampunk women are on the demon's trail.

    morley

    One of the things we have to remember is that, generally speaking, loglines are for high concept screenplays. Just sayin'... :)

    One of the things we have to remember is that, generally speaking, loglines are for high concept screenplays. Just sayin’… 🙂

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  3. Posted: April 11, 2012

    When left for dead by his former gang, a reformed outlaw seeks to avenge the murder of his family after an Indian mystic "gifts" him eternal life.

    morley

    Maybe if you reversed the order of the logline it might be more clear. So perhaps it would be "An Indian mystic "gifts" a reformed outlaw with eternal life after being left for dead by his former gang."

    Maybe if you reversed the order of the logline it might be more clear. So perhaps it would be “An Indian mystic “gifts” a reformed outlaw with eternal life after being left for dead by his former gang.”

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