1. Posted: January 11, 2013In:

    A mature man who tries to balance working his normal job in the day while working on torturing young woman at night.

    mrmitchboyer

    First off, I find your premise very intriguing - a man living the double life of office slave by day and torturer by night. Secondly, I agree with toastman, I think you should include more information about the main character and the genre. It's difficult to comprehend whether this will be a drama oRead more

    First off, I find your premise very intriguing – a man living the double life of office slave by day and torturer by night.

    Secondly, I agree with toastman, I think you should include more information about the main character and the genre. It’s difficult to comprehend whether this will be a drama or a dark comedy.

    Keep up the good work!

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  2. Posted: January 10, 2013In:

    With the unwanted help of a little girl in his building, a reclusive retired man with OCD tries to figure out which one of his neighbors keeps dropping cigarette butts onto the patio of his New York city apartment.

    mrmitchboyer

    This is great!

    This is great!

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  3. Posted: January 10, 2013In:

    On the verge of being alone for the rest of his life, a lazy man falls in love with a miniature woman who lives in the small model city that he finds in the spare bedroom of his new apartment, but when he can't figure out a way to shrink himself to her size he must push himself to his limits to find a way in, before he loses the girl of his dreams.

    mrmitchboyer

    Thanks everyone for the comments! Glad you find it interesting! I agree, Richiev, I need to find a deadline. throwitfar - I like the logline you suggested, it helped a lot. I've got some more work to do to tighten it up, and your suggestions help a lot.

    Thanks everyone for the comments! Glad you find it interesting! I agree, Richiev, I need to find a deadline. throwitfar – I like the logline you suggested, it helped a lot. I’ve got some more work to do to tighten it up, and your suggestions help a lot.

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