1. Posted: December 16, 2019In:

    An alter consciously riddled coma patient continues the struggle for his life and identity when he startles into traumatic recovery in search of a mysterious girl with an image

    Adam Bernstr?m Samurai

    I get the impression that Dbdb4 has written the logline in a different language, and run it through Google Translate, or some other translation software, but not bothered to find out if the translated version makes sense.

    I get the impression that Dbdb4 has written the logline in a different language, and run it through Google Translate, or some other translation software, but not bothered to find out if the translated version makes sense.

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  2. Posted: September 27, 2019In:

    A na?ve teenager takes a job as an interstellar mailman, to move to a paradise planet. On the job, he gets chased by foreign agents and assassins and discovers his paradise isn’t as good as it sounds

    Adam Bernstr?m Samurai

    Thank you. My idea was that it was partly his naivety that made him think being a mailman would get him what he wanted and that it was a method nobody else had tried. Your version of the logline captures the story much better than mine, though.

    Thank you. My idea was that it was partly his naivety that made him think being a mailman would get him what he wanted and that it was a method nobody else had tried.

    Your version of the logline captures the story much better than mine, though.

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  3. Posted: October 30, 2016In:

    A rag-tag group of technologically challenged small towners try to thwart a one ship alien invasion.

    Adam Bernstr?m Samurai

    As I see it, it's more than just a situation; it could easily be the entire second act. I'm not entirely sure exactly what technologically challenged means. Are they a bunch of people who don't know how to program their VCRs, or whatever the contemporary equivalent of that is? Senior citizens? NothiRead more

    As I see it, it’s more than just a situation; it could easily be the entire second act.

    I’m not entirely sure exactly what technologically challenged means. Are they a bunch of people who don’t know how to program their VCRs, or whatever the contemporary equivalent of that is? Senior citizens? Nothing wrong with that, since I get the feeling, this is a comedy, or at least have comedic elements.
    I agree that even when there’s a group of leading characters, there needs to be a clear protagonist, a leader. One character to focus on, even if he has a group of friends to help him.
    This protagonist needs a goal, but I suppose that is to stop the alien invasion. It’s always good to have a ticking clock, and also what’s at stake? What happens if he fails?
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