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  1. Posted: May 4, 2018In: Drama

    When a misguided and socially frustrated young Muslim is manipulated online by a violent female imposter this nerve-shredding urban drama constructs a series of events that entwines the stringent crimes of some of modern societies most deviant personalities.

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    Added an answer on May 7, 2018 at 9:10 pm

    The way you have written your logline makes the plot sounds like a series of episodic events. What is the key question underpinning this story? It would be useful to make this come out in the logline. And as the other comments have stated, to redraft the logline form the protagonist's viewpoint, assRead more

    The way you have written your logline makes the plot sounds like a series of episodic events. What is the key question underpinning this story? It would be useful to make this come out in the logline. And as the other comments have stated, to redraft the logline form the protagonist’s viewpoint, assumed here to be the ‘misguided and socially frustrated young muslim’. Not sure which of these descriptions of the protagonist are pivotal to the story. Worth looking at which are the most meaningful descriptors from the story’s perspective, and only including those. Is the violent female imposter the antagonist? What is the protagonist’s objective or goal, and how does the antagonist get in his way?
    Explanatory text such as ‘ this nerve shredding drama’ is more for marketing hype than of value in a logline, so there is scope to reduce the length of your logline and focus it on the story itself – what does the protagonist learn or overcome in order for the film to reach its climax, what is the hook, and what is the story really about? At this stage, I don’t see a clear story in it. Hope this is helpful. Good luck with it.

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  2. Posted: April 24, 2018In: Family

    A highly-principled, sentient robot must abet a dishonest, wannabe entrepreneur and win over his robot-hating landlady to avoid being recycled.

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    Added an answer on May 2, 2018 at 7:34 am

    Here's my early morning rewrite: "A highly-principled, sentient robot is earmarked for recycling, and must unite a robot-hating grandmother with her estranged family, to avoid his doomed fate."

    Here’s my early morning rewrite:
    “A highly-principled, sentient robot is earmarked for recycling, and must unite a robot-hating grandmother with her estranged family, to avoid his doomed fate.”

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  3. Posted: April 24, 2018In: Family

    A highly-principled, sentient robot must abet a dishonest, wannabe entrepreneur and win over his robot-hating landlady to avoid being recycled.

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    Nandhi Logliner
    Added an answer on May 1, 2018 at 5:36 pm

    Thanks everyone for your comments. Very helpful. :)? I have honed in on the landlady as the antagonist and amended the logline? as follows: 'An abandoned, experimental sentient-robot must unite a robot-hating grand-mother with her estranged family to avoid being recycled.'

    Thanks everyone for your comments. Very helpful. :)? I have honed in on the landlady as the antagonist and amended the logline? as follows:
    ‘An abandoned, experimental sentient-robot must unite a robot-hating grand-mother with her estranged family to avoid being recycled.’

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