1. Posted: April 10, 2018In:

    While training a new intelligent human specie, a scientist discovers their origin to be alien. He must lead an intelligence team to erase them before they emerge as emperors to human-intelligence.

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    Who gave the protagonist the order to train them? The inciting incident is that the protagonist found superior humans, developed by aliens ( which is the creepy secret ). What is the new specie's intention? Do they want to replace the human race or do they want to suppress them to use them as slavesRead more

    Who gave the protagonist the order to train them?

    The inciting incident is that the protagonist found superior humans, developed by aliens ( which is the creepy secret ).

    What is the new specie’s intention? Do they want to replace the human race or do they want to suppress them to use them as slaves? To prevent that is a good goal, isn’t it?

    >>> while training a new intelligent specie… ? ?? means that their development isn’t completed yet, right?

    Is the ‘hero’s journey’ to set-up a new or to change program for the training of the specie, to reach the goal not to get replaced or suppressed by them?

    I like the premise. It has some potential…? reminds of Village of the Damned? somehow…

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  2. Posted: April 10, 2018In:

    To save her people from extinction, a nanotech-specialist and her ultra-robot are sent to seek natives for gene-samples in a terrifying jungle, where they face a dangerous super-intelligence.

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    All right, here is my final version: To save her people from extinction, a researcher and her robot seek endangered natives in a terrifying jungle, where they have to fight a dangerous super-intelligence, before they can get their desired gene-samples. + the synopsis: https://www.dropbox.com/s/lik4gRead more

    All right, here is my final version:

    To save her people from extinction, a researcher and her robot seek endangered natives in a terrifying jungle, where they have to fight a dangerous super-intelligence, before they can get their desired gene-samples.

    + the synopsis:

    https://www.dropbox.com/s/lik4goav6aceomr/CHAOS.pdf?dl=0

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  3. Posted: April 10, 2018In:

    To save her people from extinction, a nanotech-specialist and her ultra-robot are sent to seek natives for gene-samples in a terrifying jungle, where they face a dangerous super-intelligence.

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    How about this? To save her people from extinction, a researcher and her robot are sent to seek natives in a terrifying jungle, where they have to fight a dangerous super-intelligence, before they can get their gene-samples. Does that make more sense? Sounds better, I think...

    How about this?

    To save her people from extinction, a researcher and her robot are sent to seek natives in a terrifying jungle, where they have to fight a dangerous super-intelligence, before they can get their gene-samples.

    Does that make more sense? Sounds better, I think…

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