1. Posted: June 28, 2022In:

    After his father’s passing, a boy must find a way to bring the sparkle back into his life.

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    Why is it important to him to play soccer? What does the ball represent? And what is at stake (if he doesn't.... then....). how about: When a grieving soccer player starts talking to the ball he received from his dying grandpa, he discovers the only way he can win the final and overcome his grief.

    Why is it important to him to play soccer?
    What does the ball represent?
    And what is at stake (if he doesn’t…. then….).

    how about:

    When a grieving soccer player starts talking to the ball he received from his dying grandpa, he discovers the only way he can win the final and overcome his grief.

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  2. Posted: October 14, 2021In:

    A failed private investigator becomes entangled in the disappearance of a 17-year-old girl to clear a large gambling debt.

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    Nice to hear. Let me know how you figure it out! :) what DK series do you watch?

    Nice to hear. Let me know how you figure it out! 🙂 what DK series do you watch?

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  3. Posted: October 14, 2021In:

    A failed private investigator becomes entangled in the disappearance of a 17-year-old girl to clear a large gambling debt.

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    I like the story when I read your synopsis, but your logline needs polish. How about: When a failed investigator can't pay back his gambling debt he gets 1 week to find the missing daughter of a murderous creditor. It's not there yet, but raise the stakes. Have fun, Nis from Denmark

    I like the story when I read your synopsis, but your logline needs polish. How about:

    When a failed investigator can’t pay back his gambling debt he gets 1 week to find the missing daughter of a murderous creditor.

    It’s not there yet, but raise the stakes.

    Have fun,
    Nis from Denmark

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