1. Posted: September 11, 2018In:

    When a failed real estate agent is threatened to be fired, he must sell a house no one else has succeeded in selling.

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    I like the premise, a good simple setup. It's all subjective but I think you could get away with adding more description for why the house is so hard to sell - murder house, haunted, neighbours from hell, next to a slaughterhouse etc, it will help paint a picture of the challenges the protagonist wiRead more

    I like the premise, a good simple setup. It’s all subjective but I think you could get away with adding more description for why the house is so hard to sell – murder house, haunted, neighbours from hell, next to a slaughterhouse etc, it will help paint a picture of the challenges the protagonist will face

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  2. Posted: September 17, 2018In:

    A shy researcher in an isolated science station falls in love with the voice of his Russian counterpart, when he doesn’t hear from her for 24 hours he sets out across the tundra to find her.

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    I like the idea, I think everyone has already made good suggestions. There's definitely a way to trim the word count and still stress the situation, physical conflict and the emotional one too.

    I like the idea, I think everyone has already made good suggestions. There’s definitely a way to trim the word count and still stress the situation, physical conflict and the emotional one too.

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