1. Posted: April 6, 2013In:

    In exchange for his freedom, a Confederate prisoner chooses to hitch on with a Federal posse, tracking his former commander into Mexico, where he hopes to find answers to the mysterious death of his brother.

    PeterMack

    I think you are spot on in your review. I think I tried to over motivate the protag and it only confused things.. He has been imprisoned after the war for unrelated activities. They are must find this commander so he will pay for war crimes committed. I came into this thinking Western Apocalypse NowRead more

    I think you are spot on in your review.

    I think I tried to over motivate the protag and it only confused things..

    He has been imprisoned after the war for unrelated activities.

    They are must find this commander so he will pay for war crimes committed.

    I came into this thinking Western Apocalypse Now and then things started to get complicated.

    Thanks for your well thought out comments.

    -Pete

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  2. Posted: April 9, 2013In:

    As attempt to belatedly connect with her estranged and recently deceased sister, a woman goes on an experimental vacation trip with the sister's avant-garde theater troupe, in which a real-time play unfolds as the itinerary progresses. When she witnesses a murder, then narrowly escapes being a murder victim herself, her trip becomes a life-and-death struggle to determine what's part of the script and what is real.

    PeterMack

    Here's a stab at it: When a woman goes on the road with her deceased sister?s experimental theater troupe, she must decide what's real and what's fiction or she may be written out" of the play for good.

    Here’s a stab at it:
    When a woman goes on the road with her deceased sister?s experimental theater troupe, she must decide what’s real and what’s fiction or she may be written out” of the play for good.

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  3. Posted: March 18, 2013In:

    Two brothers, one an ex-con and the other a divorced father of two kids, face the foreclosure of their family?s West Texas farm. They team for a skillfully-calculated bank robbing spree that puts them on a collision course with two Texas Rangers determined to take them down.

    PeterMack

    This is my kind story. Congrats on making the Black List. Figured I'd humbly take a stab at simplifying your log line: Two brothers, desperate to save the family farm, embark on a bank robbing spree that puts them on a collision course with a pair of determined Texas Rangers.

    This is my kind story. Congrats on making the Black List. Figured I’d humbly take a stab at simplifying your log line:

    Two brothers, desperate to save the family farm, embark on a bank robbing spree that puts them on a collision course with a pair of determined Texas Rangers.

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