1. Posted: January 21, 2013In:

    A rebellious teenage girl and her brother discover a time-traveling chaise lounge in their Grandmother's attic- trapped in the past and facing King Tut's wrath, they find help from an unlikely source- their teenage Grandmother in 1956.

    Patrick

    The idea is good. The logline itself is on log run-on sentence, and should be double checked for grammar prior to any official substitution.

    The idea is good. The logline itself is on log run-on sentence, and should be double checked for grammar prior to any official substitution.

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  2. Posted: December 24, 2012In:

    An elite member of the galactic Special Forces is wrongly convicted for a crime committed by a congressman?s son. His attorney must convince the congressman of his innocence, while he serves his sentence at an experimental prison camp.

    Patrick

    Thanks for your comments. I've posted an update.

    Thanks for your comments. I’ve posted an update.

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  3. Posted: December 23, 2012In:

    Oscar remembers his past and wonders why he is still a loser. That is until he meets the woman of his dreams.

    Patrick

    I really appreciate the assistance Gentlemen. How about this one? During the course of his routine loser life, Oscar, meets the woman of his dreams, and must convince himself and his friends that she?s the one.

    I really appreciate the assistance Gentlemen.

    How about this one?

    During the course of his routine loser life, Oscar, meets the woman of his dreams, and must convince himself and his friends that she?s the one.

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