Thanks FFF and Alan, I definitely agree with all of your points. With the inciting event I wanted to write that it was the involuntary relocation, but I was a little confused because to me there seemed to be two major events and I wasn’t sure which one to write without going over the word count.

Here is my revised version of the logline, I would really appreciate more critique as I am learning to write better loglines 🙂 – (I’m not sure if this logline really describes the movie as a comedy, I’m struggling with that part).

“A London cop with an overdeveloped sense of duty is involuntarily reassigned to a remote English village. He suspects foul play after a series of grisly accidents, and discovers a dark secret amongst the town residents. He and his clumsy new partner must now work together to bring justice to the small town of Sandford.”