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    A lonely night time worker, at a weather station, has gotten tired of his pathetic life, whose wife and children don?t even respect him, when suddenly he meets a woman at work who will change his life for the better ? and the worse.

    Ratman

    Thanks for the advice guys! And I understand the criticism, I established too much at the beginning, with no understanding of what the main character wants. How about this: "When a night time worker, with a family that doesn't respect him, decides he wants to make his life and job more interesting,Read more

    Thanks for the advice guys! And I understand the criticism, I established too much at the beginning, with no understanding of what the main character wants.
    How about this:
    “When a night time worker, with a family that doesn’t respect him, decides he wants to make his life and job more interesting, he meets a woman that offers him a chance to change all that.”
    Better?

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