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  1. Posted: July 30, 2013

    A divorced, middle-aged man is unexpectedly given full custody of his two teenage kids after his ex-wife dies in a freak accident. In exchange for his kids' cooperation, he has to participate in their school's breakdance recital.

    Richard Cosgrove
    Added an answer on July 31, 2013 at 8:48 am

    The breakdancing idea certainly stands out, and dance and "comedy dad" movies are popular. My impressions are that the story gets off to too-grim start. The mother dies and the father "unexpectedly" gets custody. That implies that there was a good reason why he get custody, if custody after the mothRead more

    The breakdancing idea certainly stands out, and dance and “comedy dad” movies are popular.

    My impressions are that the story gets off to too-grim start. The mother dies and the father “unexpectedly” gets custody. That implies that there was a good reason why he get custody, if custody after the mother’s death is shock.

    The reasons for his entering a breakdancing competition need to be stronger: he wants his kids’ cooperation is a reason, but you haven’t said what he wants their cooperation to do. Rob a bank? Launder money? Convince his girlfriend to marry him?

    Genres are also very mixed: the story begins with a mother being killed (tragic drama), and a middle-aged man breakdancing to impress his kids (comedy).

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