1. Posted: March 17, 2017In:

    A young na?ve soldier in love gets her leave denied but decides to go AWOL to fulfill her dying boyfriend’s wish only to find out that he has a more sinister plan behind those weary eyes.

    RussellN Samurai

    Try "When a young, naive soldier is denied leave?and goes AWOL, she discovers ?her dying boyfriend has a sinister plan ". ?Can you see that it says the same thing but the phrasing is?more "punchy"? ?Now over to the real experts.

    Try “When a young, naive soldier is denied leave?and goes AWOL, she discovers ?her dying boyfriend has a sinister plan “. ?Can you see that it says the same thing but the phrasing is?more “punchy”? ?Now over to the real experts.

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  2. Posted: January 6, 2017In:

    When she discovers a clue to NASA’s plan to escape Earth for a new world years before disaster and war ravaged the planet, a scavenger must use what she’s collected to find the mythical “last rocket” to escape our world and launch a new beginning for mankind.

    RussellN Samurai

    Aha. so how about this: In a post-apocalyptic future, an impending wormhole entices a nostalgic scavenger to find the mythical rocket created?to exorcise it so she can ?launch a new beginning for mankind.

    Aha. so how about this:

    In a post-apocalyptic future, an impending wormhole entices a nostalgic scavenger to find the mythical rocket created?to exorcise it so she can ?launch a new beginning for mankind.

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  3. Posted: January 6, 2017In:

    When she discovers a clue to NASA’s plan to escape Earth for a new world years before disaster and war ravaged the planet, a scavenger must use what she’s collected to find the mythical “last rocket” to escape our world and launch a new beginning for mankind.

    RussellN Samurai

    I'm seeing a post-apocalyptic Earth, and a hunt for glory/renewal. ?How's this as a rephrasing/trimming: An impending?wormhole entices?a nostalgic scavenger to ?find the mythical "last rocket ever built" so she can? launch a new beginning for mankind.

    I’m seeing a post-apocalyptic Earth, and a hunt for glory/renewal. ?How’s this as a rephrasing/trimming:

    An impending?wormhole entices?a nostalgic scavenger to ?find the mythical “last rocket ever built” so she can? launch a new beginning for mankind.

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