1. Posted: June 6, 2015In:

    When a schizophrenic man is released from a futuristic mental institution, specializing in curing your inner ?demons?, learns that he is being hunted by an assassin, he must rely on his fragmented memories to survive.

    sbodalia

    What he must do is find "the man" running the institute with the help of this assassin/agent. Now how exactly do I word something like that especially since this man is one of the biggest plot points and mystery of the film.

    What he must do is find “the man” running the institute with the help of this assassin/agent. Now how exactly do I word something like that especially since this man is one of the biggest plot points and mystery of the film.

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  2. Posted: June 6, 2015In:

    When a schizophrenic man is released from a futuristic mental institution, specializing in curing your inner ?demons?, learns that he is being hunted by an assassin, he must rely on his fragmented memories to survive.

    sbodalia

    Thanks everyone for the great feedback. There's lots to the story that I'm trying to condense into one sentence. Still working on it. But what do you guys think of the updated logline?

    Thanks everyone for the great feedback. There’s lots to the story that I’m trying to condense into one sentence. Still working on it. But what do you guys think of the updated logline?

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  3. Posted: June 6, 2015In:

    When a schizophrenic man is released from a futuristic mental institution, specializing in curing your inner ?demons?, learns that he is being hunted by an assassin, he must rely on his fragmented memories to survive.

    sbodalia

    Thanks for the feedback. Made some changes. Let me know what you think.

    Thanks for the feedback. Made some changes. Let me know what you think.

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