1. Posted: October 16, 2015In:

    Life is beutiful- When the second world war starts, a jewish man and his son get sent to a concentration camp and he does everything he can to protect his son from the dangers and reality of the camp.

    seanamulvihill Logliner

    it is good but i think the part about the wife should be included. ?maybe more about ?"against all odds, a simple italian jew finds a way to survive the holocaust with his family intact"

    it is good but i think the part about the wife should be included. ?maybe more about ?”against all odds, a simple italian jew finds a way to survive the holocaust with his family intact”

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  2. Posted: November 19, 2015In:

    A hard-boiled bank auditor decides to get along with her disgruntled colleagues but finds a note warning her of a series of e-frauds targeted to sink her bank, now she must tighten up to find out out who the master thief is or lose her job.

    seanamulvihill Logliner

    i would lose the part about getting along with others, you don't need it. ?but i don't see the arc of the protagonist: if she is already hard boiled, why does she need to tighten up?

    i would lose the part about getting along with others, you don’t need it. ?but i don’t see the arc of the protagonist: if she is already hard boiled, why does she need to tighten up?

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  3. Posted: December 6, 2015In:

    A ‘Thrill-Thirsty’ son learns that ‘Knowledge is a double-edged sword’ and promises to wield it wisely, after crossing roads with his Inspiring-Mentor, his Dad (a celebrated Police-Officer!).

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    seanamulvihill Logliner

    i think we need a lit bit more of the external plot in the logline. ?Here it just sounds like an introspective journey...who is the enemy he will have to face to wield this knowledge in order to win?

    i think we need a lit bit more of the external plot in the logline. ?Here it just sounds like an introspective journey…who is the enemy he will have to face to wield this knowledge in order to win?

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