1. Posted: March 6, 2016In:

    When an abducted news reporter?s ransom remains unpaid, her timid stalker must infiltrate a ruthless kidnapping ring before she?s executed.

    Sumi Logliner

    This is just my opinion - that the key character is not the first person we "meet" in the logline so that sets up some confusion about who the protagonist is. Hope that helps.

    This is just my opinion – that the key character is not the first person we “meet” in the logline so that sets up some confusion about who the protagonist is.

    Hope that helps.

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  2. Posted: February 27, 2016In:

    When a young man is found out for desiring his older brother’s beautiful wife, he must go on a journey into the past to discover the cost of possessing a forbidden prize.

    Sumi Logliner

    Thanks for your comments all

    Thanks for your comments all

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  3. Posted: March 1, 2016In:

    When a vintage cowboy doll’s status as favourite toy is threatened by the arrival of a brand new space ranger action figure, the cowboy tries to assert his dominance but his jealous antics get them both lost while moving day looms closer and closer.

    Sumi Logliner

    Toy Story - well I'm not the expert, but the logline has got 2 key points in it. Character and inciting incident. I guess you might want to work on the "action" bit which the character must do to resolve the situation. Hope that helps.

    Toy Story – well I’m not the expert, but the logline has got 2 key points in it. Character and inciting incident. I guess you might want to work on the “action” bit which the character must do to resolve the situation. Hope that helps.

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