1. Posted: December 5, 2021In:

    A teenage girl discovers a talking cat only to find out she must return him to his owners in 1970s Stockholm.

    tschrack Penpusher

    I agree. Let us know what happens if he doesn't return the cat. Bad idea: could the teenage girl be mute and the cat speaks for her? I don't think we need 1970s or Stockholm. It does read like a time travel movie.

    I agree. Let us know what happens if he doesn’t return the cat. Bad idea: could the teenage girl be mute and the cat speaks for her? I don’t think we need 1970s or Stockholm. It does read like a time travel movie.

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  2. Posted: November 20, 2021In:

    When a future millionaire obsessed with time travel sets in motion his evil plan to achieve it, a high school boy with superpowers tries to stop the future catastrophe.

    tschrack Penpusher

    I'm also not sure who the protagonist is. The high schooler sounds like the antagonist.

    I’m also not sure who the protagonist is. The high schooler sounds like the antagonist.

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  3. Posted: November 20, 2021In:

    When a future millionaire obsessed with time travel sets in motion his evil plan to achieve it, a high school boy with superpowers tries to stop the future catastrophe.

    tschrack Penpusher

    Maybe instead of using "future" twice, you could use "imminent" the second time? Or slim it down even further: When an obsessive time traveler has everything in place to get his future millions, a superpowered high-schooler is the only thing left standing in his way. ^^My example sounds more like aRead more

    Maybe instead of using “future” twice, you could use “imminent” the second time? Or slim it down even further:

    When an obsessive time traveler has everything in place to get his future millions, a superpowered high-schooler is the only thing left standing in his way.

    ^^My example sounds more like a premise than a logline but something to think about.

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